– Add more of YOUR VOICE to the original paper and each sub topic inside ( add your point of view to each subtopic on the paper like; what do you think are the causes of pollution, Increased radiations on the earths surface, Melting of the glacier, what are the Health hazards, etc)
– Come up with measures YOU would implement to control pollution. ( add to measures to control pollution)
– Add a more specific introduction about pollution and ozone depletion and a stronger and specific 2-3 sentence thesis statement.
