, As I read your draft, the bigger areas to adjust are the following: Make sure to review all the common grammar and language issues, such as correct punctuation, avoiding contractions, using third person, and all the other things I normally comment about on your essays. Review the formatting on your references page. Make sure trend is not ADHD in general and your essay is not informational. It needs to be a trend, something that has changed significantly in the last 7-10 years. (What has changed in this impact on schooling over the last 7-10 years?) Then you will be able to address what caused the trend or what consequences the trend has had in society. Right now your focus is not a trend, but ADHD in general. You can see this by the fact that your consequences are not from a trend in ADHD, but rather caused by ADHD itself.
