Fix these following issues:
1)
You ask what can be cut down, and then I would say that the section on liberalism is too long. Eg. What matters about choices is not essential when we talk about geopolitics in the Arctic, as does individual freedom. As we talked about in the previous guide, it is important to bring out the essence of theories when it comes to what they are about to explain, namely conflict and / or cooperation in the Arctic. You can also, as stated earlier, cut down on the account of the players. We come all the way to page 25 before the discussion begins.
2) The issue:
As you remember, we talked about taking climate change out of your problem (and then from the abstract, etc.) as there is not much focus on this in the report. You should describe to a greater extent what is happening to the climate and why this is having an impact on the region. At the very least, go over the whole assignment and make sure you have a “red thread” that goes from your problem and through the entire assignment. It is particularly important that you refer to climate change in the discussion. How does climate change affect the various factors/areas that you highlight?
3) Structure:
Change the order in which you present the Arctic players. Is it perhaps not logical that China is presented before the Arctic states?
4) Discussion:
I also still think there is a disproportionate emphasis on “lack of infrastructure” and “harsh business environment”, while militarization is only described with one small section. You must also think about the connection between accountability and discussion. Eg. The actors you mention in the report should be addressed in the discussion. What role does e.g. NATO and China when it comes to increased conflict potential? Or what is the role of the EU in working for increased cooperation? Such things are important to include. And, as I mentioned last time, remember that some of these factors/areas you mention can potentially create both conflict and collaboration?
Use time well now to “streamline” the task, clear away things that don’t need to be included, and make the “red thread” clearer.
