“This is much better. Youve done a good job comparing and contrasting the poem and film and you make several good points about the similarities and differences. The paper would benefit from attention to sentence clarity (I encourage working with the Writing Center tutors on this; the info is at the top of the course OpenLab page); correct citations (you want to use textual evidence from the poem to support your argumentplease see the Paper 1 handout for the correct citation format); and clarifying a few points (why is one refugee camp mentioned in particular here?). Overall, this is solid work. ” here is the prof response..
