Derrick, the submission is missing some key elements. There is no clear thesis statement present in your introduction, so it is difficult for the reader to understand the argument being presented. There are two supporting points present, that may need some additional detail or explanation depending on what you land on for a thesis statement.
There is no conclusion present, so I am not able to provide feedback – feel free to resubmit with this included.
The references are not formatted in APA. I recommend that you review the Online Writing Lab section on this, which provides examples you can use as a template. See: https://owl.excelsior.edu/citation-and-documentation/apa-style/apa-references/online-journal-articles-apa-references/
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