This is an argumentative essay of regular schooling vs homeschooling, specifically that regular schooling represents a better option for a child and his or her social development because of the important of socialization and interaction with other children.
-This essay has to make modifications such as; Be more specific in the introduction, provide more history, numbers, statistics, be more specific about what type of regular school is being talked about, such as high school, middle school, etc.
-Add more facts, statistics, scientific evidence of what is argued in the body paragraph.
-Also add more about the other point of view in this case homeschooling, types of homeschooling and why these types of education do not represent a better option for a child (demonstrate with facts, statistics, testimonials, personal experiences, etc.)
-In this essay there are interesting points of the argument but many of the sources were not cited or named in the body paragraph to prove their truth.
-3 more full pages will be added to this essay, plus the modifications.
